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Re: the daydreams of a fish (when i open my eyes, all i see is the sky)
Hi canopy! As someone who also loves playing with line breaks and indents, the format of this piece really spoke to me. I like how the decisions you make about ...
Jul 19 -
Re: The car didn't stop (a true story)
Hi Starryy! Firstly, I'm very sorry to see that this is a true story. That must have been so difficult for you, and perhaps also difficult to write about, so ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: anthill
Hello! This is a very striking poem, firstly because I don't see right-justified poems rather than left-justified very often. I wonder why you chose that, and it's interesting what it ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: Shadows - A poem
I agree with Cats, there is lots of potential here! The poem flows really well. The rhyming is simple but doesn't feel forced. In fact, I think this could also ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: Colors of a Sunset
Hi Toast! I really like the way you have set out this poem, with each colour of the sunset having a different section. My favourite section is the first one, ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: Waiting.
Hi EvalisseRae! Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I wasn't sure what it was going to be about, and then halfway through the message became clear. I quite ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: AIO for wanting to break up with my boyfriend because he wont clean up?
I'm trying to think of what to say but my brain keeps saying "oh that's so weird" over and over, but in a good way! I love reading these sorts ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: My Testimony and the Power of God
Hi Genevieve! Thank you for sharing this essay on such a personal topic. I can see throughout the essay how important your religion is to you and you describe really ...
Aug 30, 2025 -
Re: I would if I could, but I can't so I won't
Hi Persy! It's been a very long time since I've reviewed anything, but I will give this my best effort! I really like the first three stanzas of this poem ...
Dec 11, 2012 -
Re: The Swing
Hi! This is a pretty cool poem. It's quite an original idea, and it makes me wonder where the character has to go after getting off the swing. I think ...
Sep 15, 2011 -
Re: Adoption
I quite like this. I think the repetition you use in places is very effective, though I think the "ever" at the end sounds a bit out of place. Maybe ...
Sep 14, 2011 -
Re: The Most Common Profession During the Recession
Haha, awesome! Very satirical, and I can absolutely relate, particularly the part about the less experience you have the more likely you'll retain the position. It's a vicious cycle isn't ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: Getting Over It and Maybe you.
I think you probably have the emotion to make this into a good poem, but at the moment it seems to fall a bit flat. It doesn't flow very well ...
Jul 25, 2011 -
Re: If Angels could send letters
Hello! This is a lovely song, with lots of emotion, and I really like it. It's a good, original idea, too. Just remember to proofread because in some places you ...
Jul 23, 2011 -
Re: A Trip To Torture
Ooh, I like this! It needs a bit of cleaning up but I think your rhyming for the most part is good and it lends a nice tone to it, ...
Jun 14, 2011
